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The Song

I tune in to a radio station
I need to hear some music
After all the tribulation
A couple glasses of tonic

The DJ's voice disgusts me
His antic doesn't help a bit
Ease this pain inside of me
I just had my hardest hit

Droopy now and still depressed
Then I hear a familiar melody
Emotions just get regressed
While wallowing in melancholy

That few lines I can't forget
The days seem past so long
And I knew I should regret
Not memorizing your song.
©2006-2009 ~elyBuendia
:iconelybuendia:

Author's Comments

It sucks to have your heart broken and having music and alcohol as your companions... :heartbreaker:

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:iconsilent-surrender:
to true....

it took me awhile to realise on the other hand great friends get you through....

:hug:


xxxxx

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Sell Your Computer, Buy a Guitar.

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natasha
:iconelybuendia:
Hehe...yeah but at that time I didn't feel like being with anyone...I wanted to be alone..^^ I wish I had you then to talk to,hehehe.. :date:

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:damphyr: "Love is like telling a girl you like her smile and she wears it everyday."
:iconsilent-surrender:
aw....*blushes*

too many times has life taken a sudden down path for us both then...:hug:

xxxx

--
Sell Your Computer, Buy a Guitar.

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natasha
:iconelybuendia:
Err..got to go. Talk to you next time dear..^^ :glomp:

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:damphyr: "Love is like telling a girl you like her smile and she wears it everyday."
:iconthemaddpoetess:
The end stanza in this one is outstanding! Love it to death.The rhyming started out rough but worked up to a great ending.Keep up the writing.

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T.M.P
"Don't give up...You got the music in you."
:iconelybuendia:
I noticed you always used the word "rough" on your critiques...not that I find offense there..but can you expound on that?^^ I mean, so I could work out what parts you found rough and polish them... :hug:

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:damphyr: "Love is like telling a girl you like her smile and she wears it everyday."
:iconthemaddpoetess:
By rough I just mean its more or less affecting how smoothly the poem flows when read.If you put a poem to a certain rhythm it reads fairly easy but when you have any interference like cliches or an off rhyme scheme or a huge lack of structure it's not a good impression on a reader.You'll notice I almost always critique instead of doing one line reviews but it's never meant to be offensive.Every writer can benefit from a difference of opinion now and then.

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T.M.P
"Don't give up...You got the music in you."
:iconelybuendia:
I agree!^^ And thanks for telling me that...I'll try to give critiques to your works when I get the chance so I could return all the favors... :hug:

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:damphyr: "Love is like telling a girl you like her smile and she wears it everyday."

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